Tuesday, 17 May 2016

Camp 2016

Camp Poem
09/05/16

I was shaking when the deadly game of spotlight began.
People were trembling in the darkness.
The children's shadows faded in the night.
The lantern flickered in the distance.
A lot of people fell over, injuries were all over.
The big mighty tree swayed around.
The adults spotted the kids like eagles. 
The glimmering light blinded me.
The sneaky kids vanished into the grass blending into the darkness.

4 comments:

  1. I like how you said " the deadly game of spot light." It makes me want to read more and more.
    Good job.
    Abbey

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  2. It's so fast it gets more intense by the second it's a very good piece of writing

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  3. I love the way you said the children's shadows fade in the night

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  4. I like how you used the glimmering light blinded me - Riley

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